Not venturing into critique, knowing myself this will be rather corny _ _

I've never read the story so it doesn't sort under my 'area' if Rachel makes more sense as a guy or not, but I do remember in my own writing exploits that I did tend to overcount the female populace and just write them all some boyfriends _ _... oddly the tendency is actually tipped the other way now - I tend to have too many male characters, maybe because they're more decisive (if they're Shintai anyway...)

That said, let's have a look at the drawing itself.

I love the pose. It's real sort of plucky, show-offish and sort of just screams "F*** YEAH!" in a nice sort of fashion I'd have a word for if I was slightly more adept at not having the written English of a self-taught video-gamer. I also like how you actually transferred her standard outfit and made it work on a male body. In terms of costume design it's as good as ever. You have a good eye for detail.

I wish I could do hair like that. I guess I should really just try and practice it instead of always opting for lazy and easy.

If I were to say one bad thing, I... *sigh* It's a small point, but the smile makes me think of Jaws. It's just the relative size of the line marking his teeth in the middle compared to the size of the mouth that creates the effect, which you couldn't really have done anything about anyway.

All in all though, it's real nice.

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“Honestly? I’m making stuff up as I go along. In my next plan we’re both dressed in Gizka Suits and beating each other senseless with sticks. It’s great fun.” - Atton Rand, Dark Origin

Rachel makes an awesome guy XD
And I think Chrissy said all that's to say XD
I love it :3

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RAQAEL! The male-Rachel! I think it's cool that you changed his...her... gender XD WUHAR and the new design is so awesome *W*
MORE MORE MOOOORE<3

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I'm:
- Zelda Obsessed
- Loving onions because I hate to eat them
- Drawing online mangas